July 23rd,the weather was sunny and hot.we went to country museum .
the first place,we went to a house.the house's owner a doctor.his wife had so many money.the house was too big.i was envious of the house.and we listened to the worker(two women).they were taked charge for us.but i thought it was boring.
the second place,we got to black smith.he showed us a little iron.then,he was earnest.we were interested in it.we feel very happy.
the last place,we decided to go to the exhibition room of jun.i thought the jun is very cool,exciting and dangerous.i was really like it!
the weather was good.our trip was interesting,too. new
July 23th
You wrote a solid paragraph about the country museum. You clearly listed what you did in order, and you gave your opinions, which make writing interesting to read. I think you could add more details. I have a suggestion:
ReplyDeleteYou wrote about "exhibition room of jun." I think you mean the exhibition room of guns. J and G are easy to confuse.
Overall, you followed the directions for Post #2. Grade = 92