Wednesday, July 20, 2011

about me

I come from China.And I am a Chinese student.I take part in this nazareth program.I like English very much.So I came to the United States.I think English is interesting.And I want to have some English friend.
  Last morning,I had a English test.
  Last night,I played basketball with my friend.It's my favorite sports!I played basketball two hours.It was exciting and tired.I was really happy!

1 comment:

  1. Thank you for your first post! Your sentences are well written. You have a solid paragraph. I think you could use more adjectives and adverbs to make your paragraph more vivid. I have some suggestions:
    1. You wrote, "I want to have some English friend." It would be better to say, " I want to have some American friends." OR "I want to have some English-speaking friends." When you say 'some' you need the plural noun 'friends'.
    2. You wrote 'Last morning, I had a English test." Better: Yesterday morning I had an English test. (A or an? An before a vowel.) (Even though it makes perfect sense, we don't say 'last morning'.)
    Grade for Post #1 = 88

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